October Portfolio

Monday, November 29, 2010

The Stars Above

I gaze above into the black lit sky laying on the creamy silky wool blanket

The word "imagine" appears in my mind

Wandering if this is it, the time I will see the first shooting star

Hope fills my body and anxiousness awaits

The Big Dipper is staring down at me trying to calm my soul

Noise is ruffling through the trees as the wind picks up bit by bit

Shocking to hear the fright comes along

Quickly turning the other direction I panic

However, I see the bright bold moon perfectly placed above the trees

The feeling of repose shakes over my body and I feel chills

Not chills of trepidity but the chills of peace

My eyes are dozing and I am about to fall asleep

Happiness swooshes over my body and the night is over

4 comments:

  1. This poem brings up a scene of serenity and innocence pointing out how amazing the star lit night can be. You had great vocabulary choices along with an good title. Keep up the good work!

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  2. Wow Makenzie this was really good!! You really gave the reader something to picture while reading this...great word choice!!! Great job!! :)

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  3. Nice job Kenzie! I really like it, it has good word choice and you can imagine what you are describing. :)

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  4. I really enjoyed reading this piece, the description was so detailed! In addition to that, your voice was amazing in this.
    Good job(:

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